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Argumentative Essay On Teachers Are Better Than Farmers

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100 Argument or Position Essay Topics with Sample Essays

Types of Argument Topics

For your paper, you will pick an issue to research. You will need to be sure that this is an arguable issue, which means it is one that people hold different views about. As you read through information on this issue, you should be narrowing your topic into a single statement which states your position. This could be a claim of fact, definition, cause, value, or policy.

Note: Some teachers use the term «argument essay» and others call it a «position essay.» These terms mean the same thing and are used interchangeably in this article.

Position Topic Ideas about Social Issues

  1. Is there a way to reduce abortions without legislation? (policy)
  2. Does a police officer’s racial background make a difference in how they do their job? (value)
  3. Should the racial make-up of a police department be the same as the community they serve? (definition)
  4. How can pro-life and pro-choice groups work together? (values)
  5. Should Barbie be banned? (value)
  6. Should reality T.V. shows have regulations? (policy)
  7. What is true beauty? (definition)
  8. Is video gaming good or bad? (value)
  9. Are beauty contests a positive thing for young girls? (value)
  10. Are participation trophies in athletics a good idea? (policy)
  11. Are overbearing sports parents helpful or harmful? (definition)
  12. Should young children be pushed to compete at athletics? (policy)
  13. Should children have scheduled activities or be left more time for free play? (value)
  14. What is the cause of the increase in child obesity? (cause)
  15. How can we encourage children to be more active? (policy)
  16. Should people on welfare be required to submit to drug testing? (policy)
  17. Why do so many celebrities have terrible life problems? (cause)
  18. Should media coverage be regulated? (policy)
  19. What is the effect of media coverage on elections? (fact)
  20. What is human trafficking? (definition)
  21. How can human trafficking be stopped? (policy)
  22. How do elected female officials differ from elected males? (fact)
  23. How important is it to have equal representation of genders and races in political office? (value)
  24. How can we support the election of more females to political offices? (policy)
  25. How can we get more minorities to become police officers? (policy)
  26. How can the rights of artists and writers be protected on the Internet? (policy)
  27. Why should you pay for your music? (value)
  28. Does religious persecution exist? (fact)
  29. Should people be allowed to make «designer babies?» (value)
  30. What can be done to reduce unemployment among young African American men? (policy)
  31. Should the minimum wage be raised or lowered? (policy)

Social issue topic: Does added sugar in foods cause us to eat too much?

Sample Position Essays

  • How Christians Can Believe Evolution
    Can faith and science be compatible?
  • Should You Put Your Parent in a Nursing Home?
    This essay argues that sometimes, a nursing home can be the best choice.
  • Poor Across Oceans
    This essay argues that we need to care more for people in developing countries.
  • Hunger Hurts
    How can we solve the problem of hunger?

Topics on Education

  1. Should we have a national high school exam? (policy)
  2. Is private school tuition (elementary, high school, or college) really worth it? (value)
  3. Does statewide testing (like the TAKS/STAAR test in Texas) really increase student knowledge? (cause)
  4. Should colleges abolish reliance on SAT and ACT scores in admissions? (policy)
  5. How should the country’s school system be reformed? (policy)
  6. Should the U.S. adopt an educational system like Europe’s? (policy)
  7. What causes students to graduate from high school without basic skills? (cause)
  8. How do American students compare with students from other countries? (fact)
  9. What role should technology play in education? (value)
  10. What is the value of a liberal arts education? (value)
  11. Should students be required to take foreign language courses (or any other type of specific course)?
  12. Does adding days to the school year really improve learning? (fact)
  13. Should schools continue to spend money on fine arts? (value)
  14. How should students whose first language is not English be taught in public schools? (policy)
  15. Should college athletes be paid? (policy)

Is Toddlers and Tiaras Good or Bad? (value)

Technology

  1. Cell phones control our relationships. (definition)
  2. Computers are changing the way humans think. (fact)
  3. Texting and cell phone use has caused young people to be less able to concentrate and focus (or you can do the reverse—has caused them to be able to handle multi-tasking more effectively and efficiently). (cause)
  4. Cell phones have changed the way we relate to each other in positive ways. (value)
  5. Cell phones, texts, and emails are not as good as talking face-to-face. (value)
  6. Textbooks should be replaced by i-Pads and online resources. (policy)
  7. How are online technologies changing the way we live? (policy)
  8. How is technology changing our definition of what it means to be human? (value)
  9. What laws should we have about cell phone use in cars? (policy)
  10. How is social media changing family relationships? (definition)
  11. Should parents limit teenagers’ use of social media? (policy)
  12. What privacy policies should be upheld by social media companies? (policy)
  13. What should (and should not) be posted on Facebook by college students? (value)
  14. Should scientists be allowed to experiment on human embryos? (value)
  15. What is nanotechnology? What are its applications and possible uses in the future? (definition)

Which kind of topic are you most interested in?

Is China the Next Superpower? (fact)

Immigration

  1. How should we respond to the global problem of illegal immigration? (policy)
  2. Would a border fence solve the immigration problem in the U.S. (fact)
  3. What is the relationship between immigration and nationality? (definition)
  4. What causes people to immigrate illegally? (cause)
  5. Should the U.S. have a visitor work program? (policy)
  6. How has immigration affected the history of the U.S. (definition)
  7. Should all states have laws giving policemen the right to require people to prove their legal status? (policy)
  8. How can legal immigration be streamlined? (policy)
  9. Who should be allowed to immigrate? Who should not? (value)
  10. How many illegal immigrants live in the U.S. Who are they and where do they live? (fact)

Toilet Video Games? Have We Gone Too Far?

War and the Military

  1. Is war inevitable? How does war become integral to society? (definition)
  2. How do people justify war? (value)
  3. What might help establish peace? (policy)
  4. Should the U.S. continue to act as a policeman for other countries? (value)
  5. How should the United States defend itself against terrorism? (policy)
  6. Is drone warfare ethical? (value)
  7. How is cyber warfare becoming more important? (fact)
  8. Is the U.S. engaging in cyber attacks on other countries? (fact)
  9. How did 9/11 change the way Americans feel about themselves as a world power? (definition)
  10. Should military spending in the U.S. increase or decrease? (policy)

Race, Culture, and Identity

  1. How important is race to American identity? (fact)
  2. To what extent does individual identity depend on ethnic affiliation? (definition)
  3. How does immigration from Latin America affect the culture of America? (fact)
  4. Why do Americans think in terms of a person having one race when so many Americans have a mixed racial, cultural, and/or ethnic background? (value)
  5. Is it a good idea for people to adopt children from another ethnic group? (value)
  6. What is culture? (definition)
  7. What is the value of knowing your racial and cultural heritage? (value)
  8. Should schools be required to teach multiculturalism? (policy)
  9. Should churches work harder to be multi-racial? (value)
  10. How can parents help raise their children to be appreciative of other cultures? (policy)

Sample Position Paper Topics

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Private property sign: Most of Texas is private land but in California, 50% of the land is public property. What is the responsibility of the government to preserve public lands? (value)

Bikers on wildflower watching trip: Should helmet laws be enforced? (policy)

People on private property: Do scenic wildflower areas belong to the public? Clearly not everyone obeyed the warnings. Right or wrong? (policy)

Hay tractor on road: What is the right way to handle big loads on the highway? What about here? Who should have the right of way—farmers or drivers? (fact)

Why is there an epidemic of obesity in the U.S. Do people eat too much or the wrong kind of food?(cause)

Environmental Issues

  1. Is global warming a problem and if so, what can we do about it? (fact)
  2. How can we resolve the economy versus environment debate? (policy)
  3. How can we be sure to provide clean water for everyone? (policy)
  4. What responsibility do Americans have for providing clean water to other nations? (value)
  5. How will the worldwide population increase affect our planet? (fact)
  6. What can be done to stop poaching of endangered species? (policy)
  7. Is hunting good for the environment? (definition/fact)
  8. How can citizens be responsible for their local environment? (policy)
  9. What can manufacturers do to help clean up the earth? (fact)
  10. What is the importance of clean water? (fact)
  11. What is the relationship between health and pollution? (fact)
  12. How does the current trend of species extinction compare to the past? (fact)
  13. What can Americans do to stop global pollution? (policy)
  14. How can we encourage people to recycle more? (value)
  15. How does global warming increase the dangers of disease in the U.S. (fact)

Use Your Textbook for Topic Ideas

Sometimes, it can help to look through your textbook to find essays to spark ideas. In my class, we use a book by Nancy Wood called Perspectives on Argument. In the back of this book is a list of suggested issues and articles related to those issues. Usually, these articles are just a start for looking for a topic. You can take an idea from the article you like and then research it to find out what different people think about that issue.

Use YouTube to Find Argument Essay Ideas

Still having trouble finding a topic? Try looking up an issue you are interested in on YouTube. You might get some good ideas just browsing around.

Share Your Topic Ideas!

If you’ve written a position or argument essay, leave a comment and tell us what you’ve written about. You might give someone else a good idea. If you’ve written and posted a position paper online, then leave the link so people can see it. In fact, they may want to reference your article or respond to it in their paper.

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VirginiaLynne 2 years ago from United States Author

Hi Safa—Here are the main steps:

1. Choose a question you are going to write about. Then think about what your answer to the question is going to be.

2. Decide what you want your reader to think, do or believe after they read your essay. That is your thesis (the answer to your question).

3. Decide who you want to persuade to believe this (that is your reader or audience). Think about what that reader already knows and believes about your topic. That will help you develop your arguments. The reader should not be someone who already believes what you do. If they do, you aren’t really arguing are you?

4. Think of at least 3 reasons why your reader should believe your thesis. Those reasons will be the main body part of your essay.

5. Think of examples or evidence which supports each of those reasons. That is what you will use to support those three reasons.

6. What objections will your reader have? Write those out and also your answers to those objections. This will be a paragraph after your reasons.

7. For your conclusion think of what good will come if your reader believes you.

VirginiaLynne 2 years ago from United States Author

Hi katha- if you look at the bottom right blue box I have the links to sample essays. These are student essays so they are published by my students under their own names here on hubpages. Maybe I should move these up on the page so you can find them more easily.

VirginiaLynne 2 years ago from United States Author

Samarah—Yes I think that vaccinating children is a very good topic. You can also narrow that to particular types of vaccinations that are new like the chickenpox vaccine or the HPV. Another possible argument on this topic is whether or not it is true that vaccines are the main reason for better health in people today than in the past.

samarah15 2 years ago

Is the right to vaccinate children a good topic?

VirginiaLynne 2 years ago from United States Author

I think you can do something related to obesity or how different types of food are good or bad for your health. Or you can talk about GMO foods or organic or locally grown produce.

VirginiaLynne 4 years ago from United States Author

Xstatic—I love the fact that you do have a position on everything—I like to look at all sides of things and that is great as an instructor teaching positions, because I can play the devils advocate, but sometimes I do need to just nail down my own point of view!

xstatic 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

A great «how to» for position papers. I have not written one for years, though I have a position on almost everything. Useful Hub and well done as usual.

ACT/SAT Essay Prompts and Sample Essays with Comments & Grades

ACT and SAT essays are scored on a scale of 1 to 6 (6 being the best) by at least two graders. The scores are then added together for a final composite score.

If the scores of the graders differ by more than one point, then a third grader grades the essay, providing a score which is then doubled to compute the final composite score.

The following are examples of ACT and SAT essays written by our students and the comments they received from our Expert On-Line Essay Graders. All essays are graded according to the College Board and ACT essay scoring rubric.

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Sample SAT Essay Prompt

As you read the passage below, consider how Paul Bogard uses evidence, such as facts or examples, to support claims; reasoning to develop ideas and to connect claims and evidence; and stylistic or persuasive elements, such as word choice or appeals to emotion, to add power to the ideas expressed.


Adapted from Paul Bogard, “Let There Be Dark.” ©2012 by Los Angeles Times.

1 At my family’s cabin on a Minnesota lake, I knew woods so dark that my hands disappeared before my eyes. I knew night skies in which meteors left smoky trails across sugary spreads of stars. But now, when 8 of 10 children born in the United States will never know a sky dark enough for the Milky Way, I worry we are rapidly losing night’s natural darkness before realizing its worth. This winter solstice, as we cheer the days’ gradual movement back toward light, let us also remember the irreplaceable value of darkness.

2 All life evolved to the steady rhythm of bright days and dark nights. Today, though, when we feel the closeness of nightfall, we reach quickly for a light switch. And too little darkness, meaning too much artificial light at night, spells trouble for all.

3 Already the World Health Organization classifies working the night shift as a probable human carcinogen, and the American Medical Association has voiced its unanimous support for “light pollution reduction efforts and glare reduction efforts at both the national and state levels.” Our bodies need darkness to produce the hormone melatonin, which keeps certain cancers from developing, and our bodies need darkness for sleep. Sleep disorders have been linked to diabetes, obesity, cardiovascular disease and depression, and recent research suggests one main cause of “short sleep” is “long light.” Whether we work at night or simply take our tablets, notebooks and smartphones to bed, there isn’t a place for this much artificial light in our lives.

4 The rest of the world depends on darkness as well, including nocturnal and crepuscular species of birds, insects, mammals, fish and reptiles. Some examples are well known—the 400 species of birds that migrate at night in North America, the sea turtles that come ashore to lay their eggs—and some are not, such as the bats that save American farmers billions in pest control and the moths that pollinate 80% of the world’s flora. Ecological light pollution is like the bulldozer of the night, wrecking habitat and disrupting ecosystems several billion years in the making. Simply put, without darkness, Earth’s ecology would collapse.

5 In today’s crowded, louder, more fast-paced world, night’s darkness can provide solitude, quiet and stillness, qualities increasingly in short supply. Every religious tradition has considered darkness invaluable for a soulful life, and the chance to witness the universe has inspired artists, philosophers and everyday stargazers since time began. In a world awash with electric light. howwould Van Gogh have given the world his “Starry Night”? Who knows what this vision of the night sky might inspire in each of us, in our children or grandchildren?

6 Yet all over the world, our nights are growing brighter. In the United States and Western Europe, the amount of light in the sky increases an average of about 6% every year. Computer images of the United States at night, based on NASA photographs, show that what was a very dark country as recently as the 1950s is now nearly covered with a blanket of light. Much of this light is wasted energy, which means wasted dollars. Those of us over 35 are perhaps among the last generation to have known truly dark nights. Even the northern lake where I was lucky to spend my summers has seen its darkness diminish.

7 It doesn’t have to be this way. Light pollution is readily within our ability to solve, using new lighting technologies and shielding existing lights. Already, many cities and towns across North America and Europe are changing to LED streetlights, which offer dramatic possibilities for controlling wasted light. Other communities are finding success with simply turning off portions of their public lighting after midnight. Even Paris, the famed “city of light,” which already turns off its monument lighting after 1 a.m. will this summer start to require its shops, offices and public buildings to turn off lights after 2 a.m. Though primarily designed to save energy, such reductions in light will also go far in addressing light pollution. But we will never truly address the problem of light pollution until we become aware of the irreplaceable value and beauty of the darkness we are losing.

Write an essay in which you explain how Paul Bogard builds an argument to persuade his audience that natural darkness should be preserved. In your essay, analyze how Bogard uses one or more of the features listed in the box above (or features of your own choice) to strengthen the logic and persuasiveness of his argument. Be sure that your analysis focuses on the most relevant features of the passage.

Your essay should not explain whether you agree with Bogard’s claims, but rather explain how Bogard builds an argument to persuade his audience.

Student #1

Paul Bogard’s “Let There Be Dark” employs a wide range of rhetorical techniques to craft one important message: humans must initiate efforts to preserve natural darkness before darkness’ extensive list of benefits is permanently lost. Bogard’s argument is built upon his appeal to the broad spectrum of benefits offered by natural darkness, including those pertaining to health, the environment, and the economy. Utilizing outside sources to back the validity of these benefits, Bogard completes his message with a tone of hope, imploring his audience to join him in his course.

Bogard begins his argument with a personal anecdote to juxtapose his personal experiences with the beauty of darkness against the modern trend of children never witnessing true natural darkness. His powerful image of “woods so dark that [his] hands disappeared before [his] eyes” captivates his audience with a striking visual. Also, Bogard’s use of the statistic of “8 of 10 children… never know[ing] a sky dark enough for the milky way” reinforces the sense of urgency for preserving darkness that he builds through out the passage.

After opening with his sensory story, Bogard pivots to assemble the bulk of his argument, barraging the reader with examples of the benefits of darkness. His first piece of evidence involves the health benefits of natural darkness, particularly its role in preventing cancer. After beginning his point by including the support of two highly reputable health organizations, the WHO and AMA, to provide a sense of validity to his argument, Bogard highlights the benefits of darkness and a good night’s sleep. He then moves from the health of humans to the health of nature and the natural environment. Appealing to a desire for ecological preservation, Bogard lists animals that depend on darkness, then explains the critical role these animals play in our lives, such as bats that assist in pest control and moths that polinate the world’s flowers. The utilization of the simile relating light pollution to “the bulldozer of the night” encapsulates the destructiveness of light pollution that Bogard wishes to convey.

Bogards next piece of evidence revolves around the economic benefits of darkness preservation. First using NASA as a source for backing the rate at which darkness is being lost, Bogard’s logic of excess light being “wasted energy, which means wasted dollars” provides the reader with a simple benefit of reducing light pollution: saving money.

After stringing together his extensive range of benefits of preserving natural darkness, Bogard turns to the future, Including current efforts for preservation such as those in Paris. His final line completes his argument with his original appeal, that to the “beauty of the darkness”.

Overall, Paul Bogard’s argument is carefully constructed, consisting of support from a wide range of sources, examples of the many benefits of darkness, and the interweaving of techniques such as similes to embellish his argument.

Comments & Final Grade

Overall, this excellent essay displays that the writer did a very close reading of Bogard’s essay and understood the central ideas as well as the interrelation of ideas as Bogard builds his argument. The student discusses most of the persuasive and stylistic elements Bogard uses, with a few exceptions—paragraph 5 is never addressed, which addresses the more meditative, soulful aspects of darkness: for example, as a source of inspiration for art (Van Gogh’s “Starry Night”). Although the use of a simile is noted, the almost magical language Bogard uses to describe a night sky (“meteors left smoky trails across sugars spreads of stars”) could have been explored in more depth. Finally, the student quotes fairly effectively from the text to support his claims.

In terms of analysis, the two main weaknesses in this essay are the omission of the analysis of paragraph 5 from Bogard’s essay and the student’s lack of analysis in the second-to-last paragraph (beginning with “After stringing together…”) about why Bogard turns toward the future. It’s not enough just to say that the author “turns to the future.” What is his purpose in doing so? What effect does that have on the reader? What emotion is he trying to tap in the reader? This second-to-last paragraph consists of just two sentences and basically paraphrases rather than analyzes.

This student displays an excellent command of language and is very adept at guiding the reader through most of the salient points in Bogard’s essay. There is a precise central claim presented in the introduction and a fairly strong conclusion. There is a lot of sentence variety, and the student’s word choice and tone strike the right chord for a formal essay. Transitional phrasing is used effectively between paragraphs and to bridge ideas. A few typos appear in the essay that don’t detract from meaning (e.g. in the first sentence, possessive form should be “darkness’s”; in paragraph 2, “throughout” is one word; in paragraph 3, the correct spelling is “pollinate”; in the first sentence of paragraph 4, the possessive form is “Bogard’s”; in paragraph 5, “Including” should not be capitalized).

Student #2

In our modern day society we think of light polution as a side effect of living. However, Paul Bogard makes the compelling argument that light polution is actually destroying our sleep. Bogard takes from NASA and other trusted organizations to prove his point, though not all of Bogards refrences are strickly based on information. Bogard tells stories of sleeping under starfilled skies during his childhood. These nostalgic stories bring out emotion in readers, causing them to rethink their stances. Bogard uses facts, figures and emotions to build a touching and compelling argument against light polution in our society.

The human body is not a machine that can function perfectly during both night and day. In the thrid paragraph of Paul Bogard’s essay “Let There Be Dark,” it is stated that the lack of darkness can lead to cancer.

“Our bodies need darkness to produce the hormone melatonin, which keeps certain cancers from developing, and our bodies need darkness for sleep.” (3) Without darkness, the body cannot sleep. Some people have tried to work around that fundamental rule, but failed. Bogart brings up the point that a lack of sleep can cause some sevear medical problems, such as: depression, diabetes, obesity, and cardiovascular disease. Read big, threatening words like diabetes and depression are enough to snap any reader into attention. fear always has, and always will be a great motivator for the human race. Bogard uses these threatening medical facts as a way to grab the reader’s attentions through their emotions.

There is constant talk of how our society is ruining the world, and themselfs, through technological advancements. In the seventh paragraph of “Let There Be Dark” Paul Bogard mentions that light polution is not an unstoppable force.

“Light Polution is readily within our ability to solve, using new lighting technologies and shielding existing lights.” (7) Bogard brings up his ideas on how to stop the light epidemic. Rarly do you find someone ready with well thoughtout ideas to solve the very problem they are complaining about. Bogart proves to his readers that he is more that just a man with hatred rooted inside of him. Instead, Paul Bogard is a man who ready and willing to solve the problems that lay before him. Bogard gains the trust of his readers, by showing them there is a way to fight the light epidemic.

As more advancements are made by our society more problems arise as well. For the most part, technological advancements have made day to day life easier Though, our day to day lifes have also been filled with countless arguments of how we are ruining our planet. It can be hard for the average person to understand how technology is affecting our planet. Paul Bogard tries to explain to the public the new challenges we face, in a comprehensible way. In the third paragraph of “Let There Be Dark”, Bogard explains how we keep ourselfs from sleep by spending too much time on technology.

“Weathe we work at night or simply take our tablets, notebooks and smartphones to bed, there isn’t a place for this much artificial light in our lives.” (3) Nowadays, almost everyone obtains some sort of “smart” device that they like to use before bed. Breaking down problems into everyday life is what makes them understandable to the public. Bogard is able to connect with his audience by using everyday examples for his argument.

Most members of the average public are not science or english majors. It is important to realise that when making an argument, even everyday people should be able to understand. Paul Bogard perfects the idea of crafting an complex argument that is easy to understand. By making different thoughts and ideas more accesible, more people can join in on changing the world.

Comments & Final Grade

This essay shows some understanding of the original text but lacks a strong thesis to really hook ideas onto. The writer starts off by saying the author’s argument is that “light pollution is destroying our sleep,” but, by the end, the student is down to “more people can join in on changing the world,” which shows that he’s lost the thread of the argument in an effort to use evidence from the text. Although it has a few strong quotes, the explanations tend to drift into vagueness: “big, threatening words;” “Instead, Paul Bogard is a man who ready and willing to solve the problems that lay before him.” (this is an empty platitude and says nothing about the text); “our day to day lifes have also been filled with countless arguments of how we are ruining our planet” (filler; off topic to the essay). Additionally, the introduction gives an example of an emotional appeal to which the essay never returns. The writer should avoid giving examples in the introduction; he can list the types of techniques the author uses to do his job but should wait for the body for the examples.

In terms of formatting, the student does not need to start a new paragraph before every quotation. Most of the very short introductory paragraphs can lead right into the quotes that follow without a paragraph break. Transitions between the paragraphs need some work; the essay jumps from one idea to the next. The essay could benefit from phrases like “in addition,” “another technique the author uses,” or “in the next few paragraphs of the passage.” “Pollution” is misspelled every time. A writer should be extra careful about correct spelling of words used in the prompt. “Themselfs” and “ourselfs” should be “themselves” and “ourselves.” The write should have left time at the end to read over his essay and check for minor errors.

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Sample ACT Essay Prompt

Parental Expectations Based on Gender

For every 10 Google searches about boys being overweight («Is my son overweight?») there are 17 about girls («Is my daughter overweight?»). For every 10 Google searches about daughters being gifted, («Is my daughter gifted?»), there are 25 for boys («Is my son gifted?»). This recent study of Internet search data suggests that parents may hold different expectations for their children based on gender; it appears that parents may be want their girls thinner and their boys smarter.

The data on the search is accurate, but is the explanation? Do parents hope for different things for their sons and daughters?

Read and carefully consider these perspectives. Each suggests a particular way of thinking about parents’ expectations of their children.

Student #1

Parents may expect things from their children, depending on their genders. Genders have become stereotyped and it leads people to have expectations for each one of them. Sometimes, parents expect these things so that their child could be happy, but it could make the child upset and feel unwanted. Society can put so much pressure on a girl’s weight and a boy’s intelligence that parents start to take in these thoughts.

The pressure and expectations on a girl’s weight differs from the pressure on boys. Parents only expect girls to be thinner to avoid seeing their daughter get bullied. Peers can be more harsh to fat girls than they can be to fat boys. Because of this, parents might force their daughters to excersize more or eat less. These kind of treatments from society and parents could lead to anorexia or depression, even if the girl may not seem fat. I don’t think anyone should care about the weight of anyone. People should only pay attention to themselves. Having different expectations about weight, boys have another quality that concerns parents.

Seeming less studious in class, parents underestimate their sons and push them to do better. Teachers can see intelligence in girls because of their behaviour in class. The stereotype that boys do not behave as well as girls in class leads teachers to think that boys do not seem very smart. Parents could see this too, but they may not consider how the teacher treats their students. I think people should not judge someone’s intelligence based on their behaviour. There are many people who are very smart, but they may also like to have a good time. Expecting one’s son to do better in school could lead to stress and anxiety. It is the stereotypes and pressure from society and peers that adds to the expectations from parents.

Parents can absorb thoughts from others without realizing it. Their standards start to hurt the child because of what peers think. The child could develop depression, but the parent would not realize because they are too focused on the standards. Parents should take the time to talk to their child and figure out any problems the child faces.

Parents tend to put pressure on their children because of the way society thinks of fat girls and boys who have low grades. Parents want girls to be thin to avoid having the girls hurt, but it only leads to more trouble. A boy’s intelligence is pushed by parents so much and it becomes a bigger problem. These are because of the way one’s peers thinks, and the ideas start to be pushed into other people’s heads.

Comments & Final Grade

IDEAS AND ANALYSIS: 3

Overall, this essay discusses the issues presented in a fairly simplistic way and does not analyze the issues in depth or put forth the writer’s own viewpoint in a cohesive way. Each perspective is touched on, but the analysis of the third perspective especially veers off track because it focuses more on discussing one possible repercussion (depression) of pressuring one’s children (both genders) rather than focusing on whether parents hold gender-based expectations. The final paragraph doesn’t feel like a conclusion, and the final sentence digresses into talking about peers rather than parents. Stay on message.

DEVELOPMENT AND SUPPORT: 3

There is some attempt on the part of the writer to develop his ideas (e.g. that parents’ pressure on children to maintain a healthy weight could lead to eating disorders or depression, and that boys’ seeming less studious is not necessarily a true indicator of their actual intelligence), but the reasoning is also simplistic at times: e.g. “I don’t think anyone should care about the weight of anyone. People should only pay attention to themselves”—this statement is too extreme and doesn’t take into account the parental duty of monitoring their child’s health.

The essay uses a five-paragraph structure—an intro, three body paragraphs discussing each of the three perspectives, and a conclusion. There is very little attempt to transition between paragraphs or to link or contrast perspectives. Each body paragraph seems to stand alone.

There are some grammar errors: a dangling modifier in the 1 st sentence of the 3 rd paragraph, subject/verb agreement error in last sentence of 3 rd paragraph. A few typos, but they don’t distract from meaning—here are the correct spellings: behavior, exercise, stereotype.

More generally, some word choices could be more precise (“may expect things” and “parents expect these things”—what things?) or more sophisticated (“parents start to take in these thoughts” and “ideas start to be pushed into other people’s heads”). Avoid wordiness. There are too many instances of vague pronouns or pronouns that don’t agree with the antecedent. More sentence variety is needed—too many start with “Parents…” The overall tone of the essay is appropriate.

Student #2

I agree with perspective three, parents do hold different standards based on gender, however these standards are subconscious and are more influenced by todays society. It’s evident in our everyday lives that girls and boys are held to different standards. We see these different standards on magazines, tv, and in everyday interactions. When you pick up a magazine it’s usually a model who has the “perfect body”; the perfect body in todays society is someone who is thin and tuned. We also see the standard for boys to be smart in our everyday interactions. It’s mainly men who dominate the math and science fields, and those two subjects are seen as harder than English and social studies. Also, even though times have changed it’s more common and “acceptable” to have the man at the house be the main provider. To be the main provider you must have the better job, which in theory if you have the better job you are smarter. Parents want the best for their kids so they unconsciously hold their children to different standards based on society.

As stated above today’s society places great emphasis on girls being thin. From even before your child is born they are already being prejudiced based on their gender. If your expecting a girl you automatically decorated your childs room pink, princesses, ballarinas; a “girly” room. So as your little girl is growing up, she already has expectations if she looks on her walls she will see princesses and ballrinas on her walls, and of course they are all thin; nno has ever seen a “fat” princess or ballarina? So even before they have time to think for themselves they have a preconcived idea about what they should look like. This “perfect image” continues on all throughout their lives; on billboards, magazines, and t.v. all the girls are thin and pretty. Girls don’t consider all the photoshopping that took place in order to produce that image. All they are focused on is what they can do to look like that. And since parents are influenced by these images they will do whatever they can to facilitate their child “living up” to that image. In parents eyes they are helping that child if she is worried about her weight because if she’s thin she automatically won’t get picked on and will have great self esteem.

Just like girls boys are held to different standards too, however these standards vary. Unlike girls, boys are held to higher academic standards. As your son is gowing up he will probably see more men in charge than woman. In America’s society it is still expected that men will be the C.E.O’s at companies, bosses, and the man in charge of the house. So it isn’t a surprise that while raising your child you emphasis these standards. You want your child to be happy and successful.Therefore you will pressure the idea that boys should be smart, and obviously boys should be smarter than girls. This idea is not done in a cynical way, in fact it’s quiet the opposite. Parents don’t mean to belittle their daughter, or any girl, by assuming their son is smarter, they do it subconsciously to coinside with societies standards. Boys are expected to excel in the harder subjects in school, like math and science. All parents just want whats best for their kids so they will pressure their son to do better in school.

Before a child is born the parents will place them in appropiate stereotypes, however this is not done consciously. Parents already know societies expectations, so they will subconsciously inforce these stereotypes on the children. Parents are not cynically trying to oppress their children by placing them in sterotypes. Instead they are looking out for their children. It’s a harsh and critical world in todays society. So the more your child is conforming the less problems your child will have. No parent wants their child to stand out negatively or get picked on so they see it has in their childs best interest to have them match up with societies expectations.

Comments & Final Grade

Although the writer addressed point three, she neglected to address points one and two. Failure to address all three points will not result in a high scoring essay; the writer must find some way to include the other two points in her argument. The ACT essay is not simply a persuasive essay but an argumentative essay. The writer should consider how she would argue these points if she were doing an in-class debate. The whole essay is spent defending why parents adhere to stereotypes. Are there parents who don’t? Why don’t they? Is every girl focused on her looks and uninterested in math and science? Do all mothers stay home? The writer could improve her analysis and support scores by broadening her response and thinking about the other side of the issue

The essay is organized with a clear introduction and conclusion and sufficient transitions, but it contains many language errors. Comma splices and semicolons need to be reviewed (e.g. the first sentence: “I agree with perspective three, parents do hold different standards based on gender, however these standards are subconscious and are more influenced by todays society.”) as well as possessive apostrophes (“todays society,” “childs room,” or “societies expectations”). “Ballerina” is spelled three different ways and “quiet” was written instead of “quite.” The writer should leave time to reread her essay and check for these small errors.

IDEAS AND ANALYSIS: 3

DEVELOPMENT AND SUPPORT: 3

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